Only A Fool Knows What It Means

[theleaveswant]

Title: Only a Fool Knows What It Means
Fandom: Heroes
Characters: Elle, Gabriel
Rating/wordcount: FRK/100
Notes/Warning: For the "temptation" challenge at sylelle_100. Lyrics by Tom Waits.


Bourbon on ice and Tom Waits on vinyl, two things I didn't expect when Gray ushered me into the apartment, and they're both going to my head. Tilt back, bare the white column of my throat. Sing sweet and languid; playing drunk, vulnerable. Bait. Prey. That was the briefing, but I've got a new tickle.

my will has disappeared
now my confusion's oh so clear

When I ask “can I keep him”, Daddy always says no. No incentive to keep asking, is it? This one though, feels like if I asked him. . . would he say yes?

Temptation . . .

I can't resist

Comments

[superkappa.livejournal.com]

First of all Tom Waits and bourbon are a combination I approve of, and both things I could see Gabriel being into. Second of all. I think what really sells this though is this line:
This one though, feels like if I asked him. . . would he say yes?

I loved that.

[shamusandstone.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I have to admit I'm rather proud of this one :)

[rain-sunsets.livejournal.com]

This is great I love how Elle cant resist him :)

[shamusandstone.livejournal.com]

She can't resist that he can't resist :)

[stainofmylove.livejournal.com]

I love this, and what a great use of the first person. Usually I don't prefer it in fics, but it works really well here. Especially liked "No incentive to keep asking, is it?" What a great way for Elle to think.

[shamusandstone.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I tried in 3rd and it just didn't feel right; I think the 1st person also contributes to the noir feeling other people report. Whatever I did, I like it too :D

[acinogan.livejournal.com]

love the noir feel!

and elle being tempted to go against the company plan always makes me feel better.

[shamusandstone.livejournal.com]

Thank you! The "noir" atmosphere wasn't something I planned from the outset, but I love how it came together.

[stefichan.livejournal.com]

Tom Waits always sets the tone for drinking <3

Elle's so cute in how she's trying to be on the mission, and play at the same time.

[shamusandstone.livejournal.com]

:D Thanks! I saw the prompt and thought immediately of the song.

[mollivanders.livejournal.com]

this was so evocative! This one though, feels like if I asked him. . . would he say yes?

I loved your use of imagery with sound and taste here. fantastic :)

[shamusandstone.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I'm really pleased with it.

[faded-facade.livejournal.com]

I really loved your style in this and adding Tom Waits into the fic. Like acinogan said before, this kinda evokes a noir feeling which is totally awesome.

[shamusandstone.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much! I'm glad everyone like it.